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I really liked the flow into this. This is really good, Crysi. I do, however, want to point out each stanza is an on-going setence. Try to change the last ...

You posted it! Yay! I really like this poem. Very touching. I like the rhythm you used into this. Also, there's a part you don't need a comma at. And ...

Its as if everything was so different A look in the mirror revealed so much his eyes red, beat up, sharp, angered. His hand in a fist, he couldnt do ...

Yo, Sythe. I really liked this. I don't see how it forms a star,but that'd be hard to do. :wink: I really liked how this flows. I also love your ...

OK just so you know the title is a work in progress. This poem is about a wonderful teacher I had and how great she was to us. Then she ...

*this was written right after my best friend and I got in a huge fight and she said a bunch of crap about me for, like, a week straight.* Child, ...

Here's a little dose of my NaPoWriMo work, one of the few things I've written so far that's worth anything. Enjoy! Is this all that I can do? To sit ...

I really liked this. I liked how you described a girl who's facing depression but hides it with fake happiness. Excellent rhythm. In the beginning, cut out "Convinced". It kind ...

Tell me What the right questions are 'Cause I'm done with this masquerade Everyday I go through euphoria Then fall to a deeper shade With every glance you give her ...

Time to move on Its finally over I cant believe I can finally breath Again Time changes everything Our love did fade Along with the feelings I felt and I ...

This feeling It's so hard to describe. I’ve been underwater before; Felt the burning, scraping, clawing at my lungs... But this is different. Because my lungs work fine. They pull ...

Your eyes, pure ponds of blue, stare into mine, muddy piles of brown. Your arms wrap around my waist and I wonder if your heart is beating as fast as ...

I don’t know how to show you, Don’t know how to tell you, You never let me put into words, Just how I felt, You always saw. You don’t just ...

I really liked this. Excellent rhyming and rhythm. I do have some concern about the message. I don't really think it's appropiate to say that it's ok to kill for ...

My entry for the instructors "On Fire" contest. Inspired by picture #1 Ten Weeks Ten weeks ago, my hands would be shaking In anticipation of what I'm about to do. ...